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Alexander the Great had a bottomless and extensive influence that lasted for centuries. He used a phalanx, his father’s Macedonian army, to draw the attention of his enemies while preparing the key charge that brought victory. Marching for eleven years and covering twenty-two thousand miles without losing a battle over the strongest foes of his time indicates that he was a legend and a fearless conqueror. What he truthfully wanted in his life was glory and heroism, rather than easy living and wealth. Alexander was a great man rather than a lucky man of his time.
In 356 B.C, Alexander was born in Pella, an ancient capital of Macedonia, to King Phillip and Olympia, princess of Epirus. At the age of thirteen, his parents hired a personal tutor, Aristotle, a Greek philosopher, logician and scientist, who thought him rhetoric and literature. The young boy had an interest in science, medicine and philosophy. Aristotle’s teaching soon came in play against other philosophers in India. When his father left to Byzantium to battle against rebels, he was left to rule Macedonia as a regent, someone who rules during the absence of a monarch. This position shows that he was already accomplished in battle at the age of sixteen.
Alexander the Great was a true visionary and leader who fought for larger pieces of territory around Asia, the Middle East and Africa. He was also a military genius of his time who attacked an army of Persians, (under King Darius III) and Greek hoplites, profoundly armed foot soldiers of ancient Greece who were on the Persian’s side and against Macedonians. Alexander’s forces killed 40,000 men and only 110 of his men were killed. When he was in Egypt, he was voluntarily made pharaoh because the Egyptian despised living under the Persian rule. He also conquered the land between the Tigris and Euphrates Rivers and found a Persian army of one million men. On October 1st, 331 B.C, his Macedonian men slaughtered them. They burned the royal palace and soon, the ancient Persian Empire fell. Of all the battles he had fought in, the greatest battle was against Porus of India, one of the greatest leaders. The Indians were defeated in a brutal battle even though they fought with elephants, animals the Macedonians haven’t seen before. Aristotle’s teaching helped when Alexander debated against Bhramin philosophers, who were famous for their wisdom. He was known as a legendary in India for his philosophy and fearless conquerors.
With his large, loyal and combative army, he united an area over twenty two million square miles. He setup a common system of currency for his entire realm, established many new cities and colonies, many of them that were named after him. An example of a city that was named after him was Alexandria in Egypt and Alexadropolis in Greece. A foundered city was even named after his dead horse, Bucephalus. Though the Greek culture was already expanding, he continued to expand from the polis to the unknown world of his time. He established many training programs to teach Persians about Greek and Macedonian culture.
Alexander the Great died in 323 B.C at the age of thirty three years due to a heavy drinking bout and swimming in a river from which he caught a fever. Despite the fact that he was an alcoholic, heavy drinking was a cherished tradition at the Macedonian court. Alexander was “great” in a sense because he had so much influence in history. Greece ruled the near east politically for three hundred years and culturally for one thousand years because of his actions. If he had lived longer, it was possible that he would have politically united the world. Alexander the Great deserved his title as he was very young who conquered most of the world. It was only lost when he died. He was the first king ever to the called “the Great”.

my teacher said it was awkward it didn’t analyze my thesis. help, can you please help me analyze this better with details? thanks

One important mistake you are making, is you need to define paragraphs, with indentation.
Thesis should be Alexander was….lucky man …of his time…
NEW paragraph.
That is/should be your thesis.
Next separate main/most important ideas, make them paragraph.
Indent new paragraphs.
Otherwise it’s not bad